Roger’s A2 class
Chapter 5 Reading Response
Big Ideas (Good- Wow)
It is likely that the group will fall apart and split because of the way they are acting right now. Evidence shows that Ralph and Jack, two of the older kids, are the leaders and they are growing apart from each other. Ralph wants to be serious, and he is upset that no one is following through on his word. During the night meeting, Jack yells at Ralph, “And you shut up! Who are you, anyway? Sitting there telling people what to do. You can’t hunt, you can’t sing—”( ). Jack is questioning Ralph’s authority. A lot of the other kids follow Jack because he is the hunting leader, and he want to have fun. The boys’ unity is breaking apart.
What’s good?
- compound sentence
- shows that they read and understood the differences between the two boys
- integrated quotation
- quotation is well chosen to prove the topic point
What could be improved?
- no page number
- could say more about why they think the groups will "split"
- could have said something about Jack's insecurities
- might have said more about what motivates each boy
- vocab
Character (good- okay)
The character Ralph seems to have changed in chapter 5 because towards the beginning of the book he didn’t respect Piggy’s ideas. Piggy kept quiet, and kept his ideas to himself, but during this chapter, Ralph seems to gain more respect for Piggy enabling him to feel more comfortable, and allowing him to speak out. For example, in chapter five when Piggy wants to speak out, he grabs the conch without hesitation, and speaks his mind, especially during the meeting in Chapter 5 when the narrator says, “Piggy tip-toes into the triangle, his ineffectual protest made, and joined the others” (79).
What’s good?
- Shows that they understood the characters and did the reading
- nicely integrated quotation
- great vocabulary
What could be improved?
- Said "chapter 5" too many times
- needed commentary to explain the quotation. It sounded weird and abrupt to end with a quotation
- Is the paragraph about Ralph or Piggy?
- The quote doesn't really prove the topic sentence
Analysis of a Critical Line (okay)
When the author writes, “Only, decided Ralph as he faced the chief’s seat, I can’t think. Not like Piggy” (78), it is important to the development of the conflict in the book. Ralph is beginning to realize that being leader isn’t that easy. He also realizes that he isn’t capable and smart enough to be the leader because he doesn’t have the brains that Piggy has. Piggy is smart and a good thinker and better suited to be a leader in that way.
What’s good?
- the first sentence
- the quotation is nicely integrated
- smooth to read
What could be improved?
- no analysis of word choice or style- example: How does "Not like Piggy" being a sentence fragment impact the feeling? Why does Ralph "face the chief's seat" while he thinks?
- needs more evidence
- could explain why P would be better than R
- underdeveloped argument
- too many "and"
Author’s Style (needs improvement)
The author uses “The Beast” as a symbol to represent fear because as the kids’ fear grows so does their belief in “The Beast”. During the assembly, the kids start to talk about things they’ve seen in their nightmares and in the dark, things such as dark figures in the dead of night and scary sounds.
What’s good?
- interesting idea
- strong, clear first sentence
- insightful
What could be improved?
- needs evidence to prove their point
- what about bigguns?
- just needs more more more
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